[mortama]

Haiku

THE LENGTH AND FORM OF ENGLISH HAIKU

Today, many bilingual poets and translators in the mainstream North American haiku scene agree that something in the vicinity of 11 English syllables is a suitable approximation of 17 Japanese syllables, in order to convey about the same amount of information as well as the brevity and the fragmented quality found in Japanese haiku. As to the form, some American poets advocate writing in 3-5-3 syllables or 2-3-2 accented beats. While rigid structuring can be accomplished in 5-7-5 haiku with relative ease due to a greater degree of freedom provided by the extra syllables, such structuring in shorter haiku will have the effect of imposing much more stringent rules on English haiku than on Japanese haiku, thereby severely limiting its potential.

Rules

It Must be 5-7-5 Syllables.
Must be based on Your Home nation in FFXI. (Bastok,Sandy,Windy)
You can Submit Multiple Entries.

It has been Awhile since Ive done anything involving Haiku if you have more knowledge or advice to pass on to others please feel free to post it up, Also Thank you to Dyire for the Topic Suggestion.


Good Luck all

:The FFXI Fiends and Admins/Moderators hope you enjoy this contest. Please look forward to other contests here in the FFXI User Content forum.

[Varizen]

You know... I'd also thought about suggesting this since it's more accessible to everyone, as would be a short story contest. Let's see...

Bastok:

The gears grind loudly
Cid oversees the work flow
Galka work steady

*bangs gong with the monk call that stereotypically goes with it*

**bow out**

[Prothescar]

First time I'm entering one of these contests...


San d'Oria 1:

Castle walls gray stone
Flowing water near the church
Noble knights defend

San d'Oria 2:

Beautiful skyscape
Running red with bloody wind
Orcish terror nigh

San d'Oria 3:

Golden griffon claw
The flag blows restlessly now
Crimson red background


That's all for now.

[Merlini]

This is also my first time entering a contest. They seem really interesting and fun.

1) San d'Oria:

San d'Oria
Capital of chivalry
Rise in great triumph

2) San d'Oria:

Brave royal red knights
Stand forth and protect kingdom
King and prince command

[Audard]

Sandy

Ancient tounges rage
Shadows of past, faded light
Turn the final page

#2

Silent Lullabys
Flowers nurture her lost soul
Their hands come untie

[Xani]

I wanted to take a slightly different approach to the ones above ^^. I'm really enjoying this contest!

Sandy #1
Two brothers quibble
Sister attempts to calm them
Fishing for Moat Carp!
(Oh yeah I bet you thought I was going for the Princes and Claide!)

#2
The gardener tends
To the late Queen's flowerbeds
Mourning silently.

#3 (and a funny one, I hope)
That poor Raminel
Runs back and forth all day long
Delivering goods.

Definately going to come back and add some more!

[rikamaru]

After watching the contest so many times finally one I can take part in

Here's some entries will think of more as I get some inspiration from running around windurst.

Windurst #1
Star Tree glowing bright
What is that light from afar
It's Shantotto run!

#2
Cardians on watch
Bludgeoning those who trespass
Ready to battle

#3
Star Onion Brigade
Truth justice the onion way
Keeping Windurst safe


Maybe I'll be able to come up with more.

#4
Star Sibyl graceful
Watches from Heavens Tower
Praying for long peace


*edited to add fourth one I'm happy with four so good luck to everyone else *

[Varizen]

Bastok

The canons roar loud
The mountain side smolders bright
The Quadav march forth.

[Eldarias]

After watching the contest so many times finally one I can take part in

Here's some entries will think of more as I get some inspiration from running around windurst.

Windurst #1
Star Tree glowing bright
What is that light from afar
It's Shantotto run!

#2
Cardians on watch
Bludgeoning those who trespass
Ready to battle

#3
Star Onion Brigade
Truth justice the onion way
Keeping Windurst safe

Maybe I'll be able to come up with more.

I like your #3

[mortama]

Some really cool Haikus you guys have got going

[BringerofWisdom(akaPebe)]

Windurst

Stand strong my small friends
We are guided by the stars
Victory is ours


When all hope was lost
And the Yagudo arrived
One man gave it all


Mistress of Magic
Thy ponytails swing swiftly
Shantoto save us


Under the Full Moon
We beseech thy dark power
Fenrir hear our call


Oh mighty Star Tree
Whose branches encompass all
Lend us thy Wisdom

[Layne]

Hella yes. Love me some Haiku


Bastok:

Dry, arid city...
Forever gray, sure as we're
Dead last in Conquest.

Missed boat. Stupid bridge.
That's enough of this! Perhaps...?
I re-roll Sandy?

I don't know what's up...
Yet. But there's something fishy
'Bout that warehouse 2...

Wall-to-wall Galka
They claim "re-incarnated",
but why so lifeless?

Cat burglar broke in.
Our dirty Mayor does nothing.
Windy, need a DRaG?


EDIT:

The gardener tends
To the late Queen's flowerbeds
Mourning silently.

When all hope was lost
And the Yagudo arrived
One man gave it all

Those are really deep.
Our lists of "touching deaths"?...Um...
Kaede's mom? We suck.

[Daeka]

For Bastok.

(Entry 1)

The arid Gustaburg;
How bleak it must seem outside,
Until you come home.

[Boldfinger]

The Bastokan Guns

Boom, Boom, Boom, Boom, Boom.
Boom, Boom, Boom, Boom, Boom, Boom, Boom.
Boom, Boom, Boom, Boom, Boom...

[Aleera]

The Bastokan Guns

Boom, Boom, Boom, Boom, Boom.
Boom, Boom, Boom, Boom, Boom, Boom, Boom.
Boom, Boom, Boom, Boom, Boom...

Windurstian taru lazers


Pew, Pew, Pew, Pew, Pew
Shoop, Shoop, Shoop, Shoop, Shoop Shoop, Shoop
Pew, Pew, Pew, Pew, Pew

[Duderman]

Gustaberg Home

Beyond the mountain,
and below the summer sky...
I left my heart there.

Far Away Now

The metal clinking
of my boots upon the earth...
Never left my mind.

Carry Me Away

My last adventure,
the finality of death...
Carry me away.

Completion

There was emptiness
when I found my Gustaberg...
And now I am whole.

[Kussese]

San d'Oria (Blows Horns)
Vexatious horns blare
Pompous Elven meander
I abhor this place.

Is the plural of Elvaan Elven, Elvaan, or Elvaans? I have no idea.

[DarkRift]

Conquest Woe's

Firstok is a dream
Lastok is where we call home
El o el Bastok

[Merlini]

Adding some more...


1) San d'Oria

Always courageous
In the heat of the battle
Never fall apart


2) San d'Oria

When the day does come
I shall fall for my kingdom
Never we depart

[Kussese]

Somehow I quoted myself instead of editing. Whoops.